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Leon,

Poetry much?

Maybe next time,

free verse poetry?

As story:

Imagery? Check.

Action? Check.

Building momentum? Check.

What genre,

what style will let your future heart speak loudest?

I want...

Metaphysics.

Your metaphysic.

Your creative reasoning inquiring into the nature of human nature. Like...

As a human being in 2024...

What are you?

What am I? (the reader)

After the "what," your personal negotiation of the "Who am I?" might evolve into a helpful ideology. With that unique personal ideology in mind, it might make sense to build an index card index of character development.

Can your story be original and yet universal? I think so. Dial that up.

The sound of your words might be fitting for a trimmed down version rewritten as spoken-word poetry.

See

https://youtu.be/0snNB1yS3IE

If you had asked for alternate titles:

The Matrix 2.0

Dreaming While Under My Dentist's New Anesthetic

Crushing On My Anesthesiologist

A Gamer's Afterlife Dream

Hope that helps,

mark spark

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